My eyes are always teeming
Heart is always weeping
I am alone in the world...
I sleep in my dreams
And i wake up with agony
Standing like a souvenir
Looking up the whitish sky
Beyond the wingless birds
The sky is the limit , trying
to reach the dizzy heights
If i fall down please !!
please forget me ,Its a
defeat of a fated animal...
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"sky is the limit to reach the dizzy
ReplyDeleteheights".the poem is beautiful.
but sky should be the limit for the dizzy heights
of hope so that in case you fall down atleast the
height of the hope will make you to continue from
half the way or even where you break your journey
towards the final hope of destination in your life
...all the best...
enjoyed the poem. though the title talks of a dizzy height, the actual lines sounds a lament from the depth of despair. i see it's an appeal to the heaven to take away the perennial sorrows of the soul.
ReplyDeleteGood one.
ReplyDeleteBut why this much sorrow? why desperation! How blessed we are to live in a wonderful world like this. As you told Sky only is the limit. The world is broad enough.
Looking for more fantastic scribbles ahead
Even is feeling loneliness, and pains it is
ReplyDeleteafraid of that The dreams of to fly the entire ,
beautiful world, Is going to fall down like
wingless birds.
The lines written was even more simple and
Beautiful which it feels to think that it was taken from your own pages of life.
The glory of Malayalam poetry is never lost.
Then what feeling had Changed to wrote the
poetry in English?
Nice, and enjoyable.
Wish u all the very best,
--- faariz
what a lamguage? wonderful...
Deletewhat a language? wonderful....
Deleteno one alone in the world ! how we can live like that ?
ReplyDeletewen we feel bad we all r think like that some time me also.
Nice
ReplyDeleteU r not alone priya. We are always with you.
ReplyDeletegood try...
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ReplyDeletePessimist thinkings always opened the doors for good poetry.
ReplyDeleteSo just think, write...but no acts.
Best Wishes.
Priyadharshini,
ReplyDeleteYou have latent talents.But the emotions you try to infuse through your words do not give the real impact. "An Elegy from coffin" had some variations of the tenses. Visit Muse India.You can find something there to hone your skill. Please take it as constructive criticism.
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hei na, never say about falling off or defeating....enjoy.
ReplyDeleteഓരോ മഴത്തുള്ളിയിലും നിന്റെ പാദസരം തിരഞ്ഞു............nice
ReplyDeleteI understand your urge to express, but sorry to say that the grammatical and punctuation errors detract from the overall beauty of the lines.
ReplyDeleteDo take more pains to correct them before publishing. Keep going! :)
nice one priya !! keep going !!
ReplyDeleteNice, and enjoyable Best Wishes.
ReplyDeletevery nice.......
ReplyDeleteIn the poetic view it is sinner
ReplyDeletenot animal
beautiful poem..
ReplyDeleteheart touching lines..
meaningful quotes..
but fully pessimistic..
u know yaar..
pessimism can do nothing in our life..
be optimistic in words and works..
u can defeat d unbeatable in life..
wish you all the best..
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A Well Versed Thought
ReplyDeleteKeep writing
Best Regards
Philip Ariel
Hello, I'm here the first time now. Read a few of your verses in Malayalam and now this. Is it that poets sing more about agony , sorrow and the lost ?
ReplyDeleteHowever,I like your thoughts put into verses , but here , why give much credence to "fate"?
Perhaps fate is feted by ourselves. don't you think so ?
Hello, I'm here the first time now. Read a few of your verses in Malayalam and now this. Is it that poets sing more about agony , sorrow and the lost ?
ReplyDeleteHowever,I like your thoughts put into verses , but here , why give much credence to "fate"?
Perhaps fate is feted by ourselves. don't you think so ?
Keep writing
ReplyDeleteBest Regards
Shamsudeen thoppil
Nice ...............
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