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Friday, February 11, 2011

DIZZY HEIGHTS



My eyes are always teeming
Heart is always weeping
I am alone in the world...
I sleep in my dreams
And i wake up with agony
Standing like a souvenir
Looking up the whitish sky
Beyond the wingless birds
The sky is the limit , trying
to reach  the dizzy heights

If i fall down please !!
please forget me ,Its a 
defeat of a fated animal...
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32 comments:

  1. "sky is the limit to reach the dizzy
    heights".the poem is beautiful.
    but sky should be the limit for the dizzy heights
    of hope so that in case you fall down atleast the
    height of the hope will make you to continue from
    half the way or even where you break your journey
    towards the final hope of destination in your life
    ...all the best...

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  2. enjoyed the poem. though the title talks of a dizzy height, the actual lines sounds a lament from the depth of despair. i see it's an appeal to the heaven to take away the perennial sorrows of the soul.

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  3. Good one.
    But why this much sorrow? why desperation! How blessed we are to live in a wonderful world like this. As you told Sky only is the limit. The world is broad enough.

    Looking for more fantastic scribbles ahead

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  4. Even is feeling loneliness, and pains it is
    afraid of that The dreams of to fly the entire ,
    beautiful world, Is going to fall down like
    wingless birds.

    The lines written was even more simple and
    Beautiful which it feels to think that it was taken from your own pages of life.

    The glory of Malayalam poetry is never lost.
    Then what feeling had Changed to wrote the
    poetry in English?

    Nice, and enjoyable.

    Wish u all the very best,
    --- faariz

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    1. what a lamguage? wonderful...

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    2. what a language? wonderful....

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  5. no one alone in the world ! how we can live like that ?
    wen we feel bad we all r think like that some time me also.

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  6. good try...

    nikhimenon.blogspot.com

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  7. Pessimist thinkings always opened the doors for good poetry.
    So just think, write...but no acts.
    Best Wishes.

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  8. Priyadharshini,

    You have latent talents.But the emotions you try to infuse through your words do not give the real impact. "An Elegy from coffin" had some variations of the tenses. Visit Muse India.You can find something there to hone your skill. Please take it as constructive criticism.


    http://museindia.com/

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  9. Interesting blog and thoughts you got going on there!! Check out my blog sometimes when you get a chance. If you like my writing and what’s on there become my follower!
    http://lifemadness-linhy.blogspot.com

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  10. hei na, never say about falling off or defeating....enjoy.

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  11. I understand your urge to express, but sorry to say that the grammatical and punctuation errors detract from the overall beauty of the lines.

    Do take more pains to correct them before publishing. Keep going! :)

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  12. nice one priya !! keep going !!

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  13. beautiful poem..
    heart touching lines..
    meaningful quotes..
    but fully pessimistic..

    u know yaar..
    pessimism can do nothing in our life..
    be optimistic in words and works..
    u can defeat d unbeatable in life..
    wish you all the best..


    www.kachatathap.blogspot.com
    musafirvl@gmail.com

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  14. ദേ...ഞാന്‍ വന്നു...!! :)) ഇനി വായിക്കട്ടെ...!!

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  15. nice one,,
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  16. A Well Versed Thought
    Keep writing
    Best Regards
    Philip Ariel

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  17. Hello, I'm here the first time now. Read a few of your verses in Malayalam and now this. Is it that poets sing more about agony , sorrow and the lost ?
    However,I like your thoughts put into verses , but here , why give much credence to "fate"?
    Perhaps fate is feted by ourselves. don't you think so ?

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  18. Hello, I'm here the first time now. Read a few of your verses in Malayalam and now this. Is it that poets sing more about agony , sorrow and the lost ?
    However,I like your thoughts put into verses , but here , why give much credence to "fate"?
    Perhaps fate is feted by ourselves. don't you think so ?

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  19. Keep writing
    Best Regards
    Shamsudeen thoppil

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